Seagull Picnic: yeah write gargleblaster

seagull picnic

Seagulls fight over forgotten fruit and crustless triangles. Unable to raise his eyes, knowing that the lack of joy in hers would harden concrete over her words, he studies a footprint in the wet sand and wishes he’d never answered her song.



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30 Responses to Seagull Picnic: yeah write gargleblaster

  1. Jennifer G. Knoblock says:

    Wow. The forgotten fruit…the concrete/footprint…love the layers!

  2. This is so sad! Love the concrete metaphor and the path you chose to take the prompt.

  3. blainecindy says:

    Oooh, I love how you said so much with so few words.

  4. Anita says:

    We regret later after realization dawns. Nice one.

  5. Kir Piccini says:

    oh that siren’s song is hard to resist. Such pain in the middle of those words as love is carried out to sea.

  6. jetgirlcos says:

    Wow, the image of the seagulls really paints the emotional background here. I like it!

  7. Turned out to be more a curse than a blessing. Nice.

  8. So glad you came out to play on the gargleblaster grid. I love the details of the first line.

  9. You’ve captured his pain and sorrow beautifully. Nice write!

  10. Claudette says:

    Strong but sad, great writing and very enjoyable reading.

  11. Meg says:

    Such palpable regret! I could feel this one in my bones. Great take on the prompt, too.

  12. KymmInBarcelona says:

    ‘harden concrete over her words’ is brilliant. So visual, too.

  13. Excellent description. I could feel the sadness and picture the regret of unrequited love.

  14. Christine says:

    This is wonderful, Kristin. The grittiness of the background – the seagulls, the garbage, the concrete – it’s all reflected in her attitude towards him. I love the detail about studying a forgotten footprint.

  15. Kristin, this is one of my favorites this week. It’s subtle, and the setting highlights the main characters’ inner beings.

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